My latest piece of work is done ,need opinions and creticism

hey every one ,i want to share my latest work ,its a metal song & everything is composed and done by me ,and i want opinions on what it needs to get to the point of something that you would actually want to listen to and say that is a favorite song ,you know what i mean ?

here is the link ,listen to it and tell me about the mistakes and at what part are they (the vocals are not done yet sorry about that ,i just made a little part of them in a rush to test how it would sound like )

www .youtube. com/watch?v=uMb0JhY8rag&feature=youtu.be

{edited with a you tube link}

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Seeing that you're new here (and judging from your text, I'm guessing English is not your first language), asking folks to click and download on a mysterious link might be a tough sell for some folks.

Just sayin'.

Ya should just link a youtube vid of it here or somewhere..............

i'm not registering to a site just to hear a track. upload elsewhere & i'll gladly give it a listen.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=uMb0JhY8rag&feature=youtu.be

here is the link guys

Good stuff. Through my computer it appears the production is huge! Dig the 3 minute mark when we reurn to heavy!

Nicely done! Can I have it?

Now you can watch it without leaving the board:

@martinsane
thanx a lot for you words actually all the mixing is done on my pc ,nothing professional but i spent a lot of time training on how to get the songs i make sound this way .
of course you can have it ^^ , so do u think i should proceed with the song and add the same type of vocals to it ? or should i start a new song and leave this one as it is ?

@chewie
thank you for posting the link that way am a newbie to forums lol ,but can you tell me your opinion on how it sounds and what you think needs improving?