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As a former High School English teacher and a life long Metal fan...I love it!

Nice ! Now you need to set that to music and you got yourself a cool little song.

That sounds like a Sabaton song.  Their first several albums each had a song like that paying homage to metal bands.

EDIT: I give you "Metal Crue":

Quote :

Take some venom and accept
That you won't see Nazareth
The rainbow leads you home

Warrior sent to milky way
UFO shooting Gamma ray
A riot of destruction

Watch the rock bitch go down, vixen spread

When the priest killed a maiden in the metal church
Armored saints and warlocks watched the slaughter
Rage of the slayer forced the pretty maids
To kiss the queen in crimson glory

You were born a motor head
Bike's in flames you race ahead
You do the Kansas rush

Racing with the motley crew
Annihilator chasing you
With guns and burning roses

Status quo has been reached
Wasps unleashed

Take a sky ride with me
Then you'll see


Read more: Sabaton - Metal Crue Lyrics | MetroLyrics

I think your poem is lyrically better than that Sabaton song but that's exactly the kind of thing they were doing on their early albums. Their song "Metal Machine" from Primo Victoria is even closer to what you're doing because that song uses metal lyrics instead of just band names.

I have never heard the song by Sabaton, but that is pretty amusing to see that someone attempted it before! But it's a compliment to be told that my lyrics are better. I appreciate that.

I take it you've been listening to Metalucifer lately.

I like when bands do that, mention and pay homage to genre. It's fun to try and figure out who they are referencing when it's not so straightforward.