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I believe that you are as talented a writer as any praised metal lyricist - by that I mean you don't have cool melodies to back it up. I did enjoy reading your poems, though

Thanks, I'm glad someone finally commented on my work.

Thank you for sharing. You are certainly talented and have a large fountain of creativity flowing through you. I really enjoyed reading these, especially. Kano and Doris Noel.

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It'd be a very cool idea to have a poetry post section.
You should push for it - I'd critique you better...
Some of your writing is good. The moon haiku is very good.
" Actual Girls " is quite cute. "
" I'm Sorry Mouse " is interestingly original !
Also...
"Like a whore in the dead of night
On the streets of the wonderland called Vegas
The seducer comes to rapture his own
The chaff meant to be burned up
Are tonight the inhabitants of the devil’s house " - that rocks, in a totally disturbing way.

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