Into the Pit essay at VampireFreaks.com

http://vampirefreaks.com/musicreviews/comment.php?entry=4354

wow! long but,well worth the read! this is excellent! very very well worded! congrats guys! this is a great one to save!

That wasn't long at all. I dig imformative and well thought out, grammatically correct writing. Too many folks nowadys, it seems, prefer the short and sweet approach. Have we become to lazy to write stuff anymore ?

Thanks for posting Scott. Now let's pester Katon to do a vinyl run for the new Noise Chaos War.

That was a good one! Nice story thanks for posting that!

I wasn't aware that they promoted good music at VampireFreaks.com ... you learn something new every day.

Strange that a goth website would review a Christian thrash band.

Troublezone wrote:

Strange that a goth website would review a Christian thrash band.

S'what I'm sayin'.

Those of you who were reading that, I didn't use word or any word processing program on this. I just wrote everything right into the review on there. By the way, I am the guy who wrote that piece on Into The Pit. Thanx for posting it Scott. I've seen my work published in different magazines in the recent years.

I do have a few books out. The novella I am writing right now shares a title with ULTIMATUM. My SN on VampireFreaks.com is LAKE FOSSIL (owner of the publishing imprint, LAKE FOSSIL PRESS and author of the book An Eye In Shadows under the imprint Broken Mindframe Books/Angry Guinea Books. The screen name came from one of my Science Fiction titles.)

You guys do have a friend on that site, and I not only reviewed Into The Pit -- I also reviewed two Tourniquet CDs, Fashion Bomb, one of Metallica's, Dagon, My Silent Wake, Saviour Machine, Grave Robber, Black Sabbath, and ULTIMATUM's evil twin Bloodstream Parade. (The ones on Fashion Bomb and Saviour Machine will also run long.)

If you guys want to add me on MySpace.com, feel free to do so. I was wondering when that review was going to make its way onto this message board.

I have a contest on here for those who want to win a free book or an anthology.

James B. wrote:

That wasn't long at all. I dig imformative and well thought out, grammatically correct writing. Too many folks nowadys, it seems, prefer the short and sweet approach. Have we become to lazy to write stuff anymore ?

James B. wrote:

That wasn't long at all. I dig imformative and well thought out, grammatically correct writing. Too many folks nowadys, it seems, prefer the short and sweet approach. Have we become to lazy to write stuff anymore ?

Thanks for posting Scott. Now let's pester Katon to do a vinyl run for the new Noise Chaos War.

James B. You should see what I do on my own website. I took some time out of writing my novella to do the review -- I've been with VampireFreaks.com five years, but just recently I started to make my presence known in some places. I reviewed Dagon and a few others on there too.

Eyesore wrote:

James B. wrote:

That wasn't long at all. I dig imformative and well thought out, grammatically correct writing. Too many folks nowadys, it seems, prefer the short and sweet approach. Have we become to lazy to write stuff anymore ?

Hey they took alot of time to write something that has meaning to them. I didn't diagram every sentence and it was informative. If I hadn't ever heard of Ultimatum and read that review, I would of came away with some good info about them.

This has to be one of the worst 'essays' I've ever seen. A toddler could do better at writing a review. Reviews are meant to be short, informative and to the point, not a meandering piece of rubbish like this (not that I'm a great reviewer, but hey, that's the whole idea of a review right?). It fails as an essay as well. Back to writing 101 with this fellow.